Tuesday, September 25, 2007

A dream I had

Everyone in the world certainly has dreams, and hopes to make it come true one day.But having a nightmare makes everybody scared.One day, I lay on the bed and was sound sleep.I seemed to fall into a place, which had a gruesome villa before my eyes.
Just then, the door opened.I felt very curious about that, so I got into the house.Suddenly, I heard some voice on the second floor.I ran up the stairs to give the rooms a thorough check.But, no one was there.So, I decided to run down and leave this house.When I wanted to downstairs, I stumbled and fell from the highest stairs.
It was so painful!I felt very suspectable and run away here.But the view before I entered was changed.Surprisedly, the villa was disappeared.Nothing could be seen.I went straight ahead, and walked carelessly attention to walk.I fell into a big hole.
At that time, I woke up with a star.I wiped the sweat off my forehead and shivered.
That was a terrible dream I had had.

9 Comments:

Blogger Ryuka(暐) said...

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6:10 AM  
Blogger Butterfly said...

1..But, no one was there.So, I decided to run down and leave this house.我覺得but不要放句首比較好可以用however之類的,而且後面那個leave要用過去式

2.!I felt very suspectable and run away here.那個run用過去式

3.Surprisedly好像沒有這個字,可以用surprisingly

4.I went straight ahead, and walked carelessly attention to walk那個用walking要不然就and I walked而且最後用to walk 感覺怪怪的

5.而且整篇故事感覺沒什麼爆點,要不然你就看的個鬼之類的也好

6:57 AM  
Blogger Samantha*霓∥ said...

I seemed to fall into a place>>怪怪的 我覺得用It seemed that I fall into比較好
felt very suspectable and run away "here".>>應該是用there吧?

8:14 AM  
Blogger 許雅婷 said...

1.and run away here.把run改成過去式

3:51 AM  
Blogger Ryuka(暐) said...

I woke up with a star
是I woke up with a "start"

5:10 AM  
Blogger FawnYma said...

I lay on the bed and was sound sleep.這句怪怪的
2.When I "go" downstairs 這樣比較順
3.I felt very suspectable and "ran" away here.

3:40 AM  
Blogger Celia said...

I felt very suspectable and "run" away here. 應該是ran

4:30 AM  
Blogger 傻咩 said...

and ”run” away here.->ran

8:39 AM  
Blogger 梁宜靜 said...

1..I decided to run down and leave this house.->leave要改成left
2..I felt very suspectable and run away her->run要改成ran

8:07 PM  

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