Thursday, April 19, 2007

Autobiography(1.2)--draft one

Before the end of the 1989, a baby girl was born in Tainan City.
That’s me!
My name is Yi-lin Kao, and English name is Tina.
There are five people members in my family.
My father is a fireman.
Although he is busy and always not at home, we are satisfied that he can take care of us and be responsible for this family.
My mother, an excellent housewife, is really good at cleaning the house environment.
I am the elder child in my family.
When it comes to my brother, you will feel he is common, but he is careful and talkative.
My sister, she is hard-working.
So we hope that she will achieve success and win recognition.
I am very lucky to be brought up in such a healthy and harmonious environment so that I have a positive perspective toward life.
I like to play volleyball and badminton.
I used to be a member of the volleyball team in my class.
Our team always wins the championship in the interclass competitions.
After the competitions, my classmates and I always go to school to play volleyball to pass the time.
We deeply believe it is because of our constant practice and our strong team spirit.
On the other hand, I also like some quiet activities like listening music and reading some famous novels in my bedroom.
These activities help me relieve my pressure and the books makes me become more artistic.

7 Comments:

Blogger 許雅婷 said...

1.five people members 已經用了people就不需用members
2.the books makes單複數要注意

7:12 AM  
Blogger Celia said...

"There are five people members in my family."看是要刪people還是members,兩個不能放在一起。

9:51 PM  
Blogger FawnYma said...

1.five "people" members members 和people 選一個就可了
2.play volleyball to pass "the" time. the 要去掉喔!
3.quiet activities like listening "to" music
4.the books "make" me become more artistic.

3:20 AM  
Blogger Samantha*霓∥ said...

There are five people members in my family.>>去掉people用members就好

the books makes me become more artistic. >>make不用加s

5:09 AM  
Blogger 梁宜靜 said...

1..有member就不用people了吧!!
2..listening music ->要加to唷!

7:11 AM  
Blogger Butterfly said...

1.There are five people members in my family
那個people members選一項個就好了

2.When it comes to my brother, you will feel he is common, but he is careful and talkative.
全部都用現在式

3.my classmates and I always go to school to play volleyball to pass the time.
那個pass the time我覺得用kill time比較好

4.We deeply believe it is because of our constant practice and our strong team spirit.
那個it 用that比較好

5.and the books makes me become more artistic.
書用複數所以make不用s

6.那個句子一段一段接著打就好了,這樣看起來怪怪的

2:55 AM  
Blogger 傻咩 said...

There are five "people" "members" in my family.一個就好
listening music加to
books make"s"

5:27 AM  

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