Wednesday, March 14, 2007

The report card--draft one

Peter just finished the final exam.
Then, the winter vacation came.
But after few days, the report card was coming.
That day morning, his father just at home.
He didn’t have to work that day.
About 10 o’clock, the doorbell was ringing.
And the postman delivered the letters.
Then Peter’s father received and read the report card.
After reading it, his father’s face grew purple with rage.
At afternoon, Peter came back from the playground.
When he entered the living room, he saw his father sitting on the sofa.
Then, his father began to ask him some questions.
He tried to give him many useful advices.
He shared with Peter two wise sayings.
”Knowledge is power.”
“Time and tide wait for no man.”
Everyone knows money can’t buy lost time.
His father said that after graduating from the school, maybe you have to use these skills later in your life.
He hoped that as you look back on your school life, you have no regreats.
Since then, Peter tried hard to manage to keep up with his classmates and made up for the lost time.
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6 Comments:

Blogger Samantha*霓∥ said...

1.the report card was coming.
我覺得可以改the report card was sent from school.
2.That day morning, his father just at home.
his father just stayed at home
3. maybe you have to use these skills later in your life.
He hoped that as you look back on your school life, you have no regreats.
you應該要用he
regreats我找不到這個單字
是不是regret阿?

8:35 AM  
Blogger Butterfly said...

1.Then, the winter vacation came.
我覺得was coming

2.應該是regret而且不可數

3.just用了很多的感覺

4.細節可以不用寫那麼詳細啦,我覺得重點出來就好

7:32 PM  
Blogger 梁宜靜 said...

1..Everyone knows money can’t buy lost time->有點不是很順呢!!
2..regreat->regret

7:33 PM  
Blogger 許雅婷 said...

Then, the winter vacation came.怪怪的,應該是was coming

7:34 PM  
Blogger FawnYma said...

1. maybe "he" has to use these skills later in "his" life.
2."regret"

7:39 PM  
Blogger 傻咩 said...

His father said that after graduating from the school, maybe "you" have to use these skills later in "your" life.要用he .his

8:36 PM  

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