Autobiography(3.4)--draft one
After the Joint Entrance Examination for Senior High School, I was admitted to National Tainan Commercial Vocational Senior High School. I chose the Department of Applied Foreign Language. My classmates are very excellent. Such as sports meet、singing contests、decorations for the classroom 、English dramas and so on.
I do like my classmates because they are kind and friendly. I think the relation between us could be the important part during my lifetime. I have made up my mind to study Applied Foreign Language after my graduation from vocational high school. I hope that I can pass the Joint Entrance Examination to colleges, and get into a good technical university. In order to have dream come true, I will try my best to achieve my dream.
I do like my classmates because they are kind and friendly. I think the relation between us could be the important part during my lifetime. I have made up my mind to study Applied Foreign Language after my graduation from vocational high school. I hope that I can pass the Joint Entrance Examination to colleges, and get into a good technical university. In order to have dream come true, I will try my best to achieve my dream.
posted by Tina at 6:39 AM
7 Comments:
我找不到東西改=ˇ="
應該可以在寫多一點以前的東西
In order to have dream 少個a
1.Such as sports meet","singing contests","decorations for the classroom ","English dramas and so on.
2.In order to have "my" dream come true 我覺得加my比較好
1..and so on前面要加逗號唷!
2.. I think the relation between us could be the"most" important part during my lifetime->比較好!!
3..technical university->science and technology university
科技大學的英文應該是 "University of science and technology" 才對。我有認真查過！
應該沒有什麼怪怪的吧^^"
句子是沒什問題，不過我覺得可以多用一些複雜一點的句子，增加深度
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