An embarrassing experience--draft one
I had an embarrassing experience when I was a elementary school student.
One day , when I went to convenient store to buy a bottle of soy sauce for my mother to cook dinner.
Then , I saw a familiar person walk across from the street.
After that , I called her name loudly.
But she didn't answered me.
I was so angery that I shouted at her.
People who on the road also looked at me.
Ther girl turned around and looked at me angerly.
Then , she said that you made a mistake.
Oh~My god!
How embarrassing the thing I had!
This is the most embarrassing experience I had.
One day , when I went to convenient store to buy a bottle of soy sauce for my mother to cook dinner.
Then , I saw a familiar person walk across from the street.
After that , I called her name loudly.
But she didn't answered me.
I was so angery that I shouted at her.
People who on the road also looked at me.
Ther girl turned around and looked at me angerly.
Then , she said that you made a mistake.
Oh~My god!
How embarrassing the thing I had!
This is the most embarrassing experience I had.
posted by Tina at 4:46 AM
9 Comments:
But she didn't answered me.
動詞不用過去式
made a mistake
怪怪的耶...
後面那兩句都重複I had
Ther girl turned around and looked at me angerly.的Ther打錯了
最後兩句重複了,可以改成How embarrassing the experience I had.
逗點前面不用控格...
didn't後面用原形吧..
I was so angery that I shouted at her. People who on the road also looked at me.不懂位啥要用also?
Ther 打錯了 girl turned around and looked at me angerly.
How embarrassing the thing I had!
我覺得可以用have
應該是"an elementary school student." 不是 "a" 噢。
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"How embarrassing the thing I had!"和"This is the most embarrassing experience I had."
兩句都用I had有點怪怪的
convenient => convenience
a elementary school student=>an~
真得好丟臉… by the way ，是convenience store
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